This is a story that I made
The lost Boy
Chapter 1
Once upon a time there was a little boy called Jack. Jack loved to run around outside. One day he was playing outside but there was a storm coming the rain hit. Jack laughed “haha this is so much fun” the wind blew he tripped “haha” the wind got stronger and stronger Jack screamed “Ahhh” Mary ran outside to check on Jack but when she got outside he was nowhere to be seen. Mary ran back inside and got Benjamin “Benjamin Jack got blown away by the wind! Mary ran outside with a coat and an umbrella “Jack are you there” she looked in the backyard,she looked at his school She even looked up in a tree but Jack was nowhere to be seen. Mary ran over to a forest she looked everywhere in the bushes behind a tree even under a rock she ran back to the house grabbed some paper and wrote child missing if found please call 011914 she stuck the paper all around town hoping someone would find her son. People around town saw the note then news reporters saw the note they invited Mary to see if she wanted to go on the news she said yes. “So Mary is your child lost” “Yes please find him he a little boy with dark brown hair a white shirt a blue jeans please find him. The police saw the news. The police grabbed there guns and got a K-9 they got into the police car on a quest to find the missing child.
Chapter 2
More and more people found out that Jack was missing and tried to find him even his school was trying to find him.
One day Mary heard jacks voice at her house she yelled “JACK!!’’
The voice laughed she kept hearing his voice laughing. She followed the voice it ended up in a forest. But then suddenly she saw a huge tree bigger than anyone she has ever seen the tree started to move but mary said ‘’probably just the wind’’ and walked away. She heard more rustling but didn't take notice.
But when she looked back it was gone. She heard branches snapping in the distance. She followed. But then she found a graveyard there were lots of gravestones of people she knows. But then she saw one that said Jack-1946-1953. Mary stared at the gravestone but she saw a shadow next to the gravestone and heard a voice say ‘’mum’’
she said ‘’jack is that you?’’
Jack said ‘’look behind you’’mary looked nothing was there but when she looked back at the gravestone in the distance she saw something. at first she didn't realise what it was but she walked towards it and it walked towards her. She slowly took steps back. It went faster and faster towards her mary sprinted away she looked away to run but when she looked back it was gone.
Mary sprant back home as fast as she could by the time she got home it was dark outside so she took a shower and headed to bed. The next day she went to the cemetery again Jacks gravestone was gone she saw a shadow holding jackes gravestone she ran after it and it ran away. She kept running after it. She took a hard left turn and then it was gone. She ended up in a forest and all she could hear was the wind and the trees she could feel the wind breezing through her hair while she was walking she was just thinking of giving up until…
Chapter 3 coming soon
Great work Jacob! You have put a lot of effort into this. It is great to see you enjoying writing. I like how you have used speech marks. Maybe next time you could read your work out loud to a friend so you can check where your full stops go.
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Thanks you for the feedback I will fix that as soon as possible :)
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